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I can't let him see that I'm scared. I have to be a good boy and he doesn't like it when I'm scared. Look at my tail wagging, Mr. Vance. I'm happy to be here.

"Getting excited, are we? Go on then. Help them out with a little distraction."  

Oh no, he wants me to go closer to all those guns. Be a good boy be a good boy.

So loud. They're all yelling and shooting and it's hurting my ears and wish it would stop. I can feel my heart beating faster. I don't like that. Stay in the shadows stay in the shadows.

I can smell them. Five different people. Men. Sweat, gunpowder, blood.

Be a monster.

Their eyes can't see in the dark. I'm safe as long as I keep moving. They'll shoot at the spot the noise came from but I won't be there anymore so I'm safe.

"¿Qué es eso?"

"¡Sonaba como el diablo!"

That was close. Be careful be careful. I'm scared but they are too and that means that they won't shoot as well so I'm safe.

Go to the window go to the window. Be scared of my voice. Go.

Mr. Vance's men are so good at shooting. He will be very happy with them and call them good boys now. The ones who talk weird are dead but I don't have to think about it because I am a good boy and Mr. Vance will be happy with me and call me a good boy.

Wag and pant and whine. Please pay attention to me and say what a good boy I was.

Oh, you guys found some money. Everyone wants money so much and it must be good but it is not for me because Mr. Vance never gives me any.

Oh hi oh hi look what I did! I did a good job didn't I?

"This is all we found."

"That's fine. It's more about sending a message, really. Yes, Dog, I see you there. Good boy."
Music prompt for :iconyouasthenarrator: Piece: Final Fantasy IX: Kuja Theme - Millennium Version [link]

Dog, the amnesiatic shapeshifter
Samuel Vance, the crime lord [link]

Vance’s men trap a few members of a rival gang in an old building, and it is Dog’s job to distract them to make the shootout end quicker.

Decided it was finally time to try a music prompt. I’ve heard many people say that music inspires them while they write, but I’ve never tried to use it as the basis for a piece.
When I heard this music the first thing that came to mind was a tense feeling before a battle. I needed to try my hand at writing first person from Dog’s POV, so here I imagined his nervousness as he puts his life on the line to serve his master.
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Interesting. The POV is a nice change from the norm. I like the one track mind idea. This was really quick and easy to read. Great piece and congrats on the DLD.
Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
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Keep writing and keep creating.
Kitri-du-Lac Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
It is difficult to give a narrative voice to an animal, without loosing the sense of the creature. In this short story, you manage to create that voice well, finding the balance between characterisation and informative voice.

~Rovanna suggested this piece to me and I have decided to suggest this to *DailyLitDeviations. If chosen your piece will feature in one of their daily newsletters. Good luck!

It would be appreciated if you would take the time to send me a note with a link to any prose pieces, by any other deviants, that you feel deserve to be featured. :)
Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you enjoyed it. I always like to be able to entertain by creating unique voices for characters. =)
AlphabeticalMisery Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
Oh wow. I really went through this quickly. I liked how Dog (his name is Dog?) kept wanting to be called a good boy. :meow: It seems very much like an animal. I like it.
Leonca Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =)
Dog is not his real name. It was given to him by his master Vance after he was brainwashed to be his slave. He is a shapeshifter, so it is secretly demeaning because it emphasizes his canine side.
Cu-Sith1 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Dog is so cute, I love his personality, as simple as it is =D I like the repeition and the wya his mind is constantly flipping from onething to another, very dog-like.
Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =)
Cu-Sith1 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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