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Uncle Levi and Auntie Gertrude and Katie didn’t miss Gramma. They didn’t even think about her until her Soul Fly Day came. Their flies were silver with big sparkly opal eyes, but Momma said the wood ones Grampa carved for us were just as good.

It was my first Soul Fly Day ever. Momma got me a new black dress and told me it was all right to cry. Katie’s dress had white ruffles and silver flies stitched into it. She pointed at my wood fly and called us poor.

There were so many people there was barely enough room for the shaman to get to Gramma. Everyone got real quiet so we could hear him say words I didn’t understand. Gramma’s Soul Fly came out of her mouth and started flying over us. It was like a paper doll, only just black. It landed on my head and Momma cheered and we sang Soul Fly Day songs. Katie whined about how she should have got the blessing because her fly was so pretty.

And that’s how my painting won first prize at the fair.
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Given 2014-10-05
Soul Fly by Leonca is an excellent piece of fantasy flash fiction, revealing a snapshot of a strange world peopled with characters who are very odd and yet very familiar at the same time ( Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014   Writer
Congratulations, Leonca. I like this very much. :+fav:
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad to hear it. Thanks. =D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thank you. =)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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xVanyx Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014
I do not understand the very last sentence, but exept for that it's a wonderfull short story ^.^
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. It's part of the surreality of this world. =D
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xVanyx Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014
you're welcome w00t! 
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on the DD! :la:
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :)
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014
This story sets up a fascinating look at an 'alien' culture, what with the way they consider death and mortality and the ceremonies that surround it. Top notch work my friend.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you liked it. =D
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LeonFoxwings Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
this is so awesome :la:
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
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Laurenabees Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wha- it's beautiful, and a very lovely story, but I don't think I understand. ^^"
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
In this world, the soul of the recently dead can leave the body and chose to give a little goodbye blessing to one person before passing on.
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Laurenabees Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aaaah, I see. :) That's..I don't know what to say, even. Wonderful. uwu
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =)
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NamelessShe Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats od the DD! :w00t: This is excellent!
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =) My first flash fiction feature too, which is cool. With the way attention spans are getting, that just might be the way to go these days. =p
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =D
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xXDoctorMythXx Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Student Artist
katie seems like a spoiled child to me, she wouldnt have deserved to get the blessing!
its a very nice story ^^
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you liked it. =)
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TheLadyYuki Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014
This was a great read. Congrats on the DD!

And I am glad Katie did not get the blessing because she sounds like a little bitch.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =D
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catluvr2 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That was cool. Congrats on the DD! :+favlove:
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Leonca Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the imagery of the flies. And the straightforward way you present this strange world - because of course it isn't strange for the characters.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you like it. =)
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014   Writer
I tend to stumble across things accidentally and then like them or hate them...but this I really liked.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
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