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I smile and I'm all teeth underneath,
white bones beneath bulbous lips,
careless quips and sinking ships
when something slips.

Hair of the cat that scratched you-
it's never new but always true.
I watched it stew until it grew
into something different.

If beauty is in the eye of the beholder
what does the blind man see when he holds her
and tells her his heart smolders
for her face?

Honesty as a policy
is not for me;
I could never see
eye to eye with it.

You can lie to buy my affection.
I will not try to hide my affliction
and you needn't be conflicted
when we can be so happy together.  
The doldrums strike again. I donít really feel like writing or drawing or doing much of anything right now, but this just came to me so I wrote it down. :hmm:

:iconthewrittenrevolution: 3/4/11
Recent critique to group submission [link]
I placed this in the Free and Blank Verse category because one or two lines in each stanza donít rhyme. Do you find free verse poetry to have less impact than traditional fixed forms? Would this flow better if I made those lines rhyme with the others?
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Annika-san Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Student Writer
I want to cry. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, my grandpa told me that once. He had eye troubles so everything looked like it had smoke in front of it. He held me close every time i cried.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is a sweet story. =)
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Annika-san Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Student Writer
thanks
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ninasilverwing Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
"If beauty is in the eye of the beholder
what does the blind man see when he holds her
and tells her his heart smolders
for her face?"
WOW. The way you managed to arrange 26 letters into such an amazing combination, it's.... wonderful :)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
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aelogan Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011
This is good work. The rhyme is a little obvious as intentional throughout, but understatement comes with practice.

Also, just because it rhymes doesn't make it traditional/fixed; and a traditional form that doesn't rhyme is still traditional.

Congratulations on your feature, this is very nice.
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:iconleonca:
Leonca Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =) I don’t know many traditional forms, so a lot of stuff ends up in “free and blank verse.”
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011
Your work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here.

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+favlove:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating!
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Sebilicious-P Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Btw, forgot to metion^^ Would you like to read my stuff and tell me what you think of it? :)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I already have a lot of other things I’m trying to take care of at the moment.
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