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It is really quite simple, Mr. Hare. Your role will be easy. You needn't worry yourself with all the niggly little details of brewing the formula. I can manage that part on my own. All you have to do is keep the lab tidy, assist in capture and restraint of subjects, and help me to prepare them for administration of the drug.

Oh, it is quite easy. I can give you the basic run-down right now, or I can write out a little instruction manual if that would be more convenient.  

Oh, I see. Well, that is good to hear. Nothing more valuable than a sharp memory. In fact, I think that should become especially clear when you have the chance to observe your first subject. It can be quite amusing to watch them come out of it, all confused and whatnot.

All right then, in that case I shall start out with the treatment room. See how it is nice and small it is? Very easy to maintain. The chair is modeled after the lovely designs used to restrain violent patients in mental institutions. There shouldn't be any problems, but I will be having you sedate the subjects before you strap them in. Tabula Rasa has a stimulatory effect, so I do not need to reverse the sedative when it is time to release them.

When the subject is ready you will draw up the formula from this mini refrigerator. The dosage is 0.017ml to every pound of body weight. Hmm, I suppose you can just round that up to 0.02ml. Heh, a little over won't hurt anyone. Most of the people I've overdosed didn't die of it. They certainly come out better than they did with the first generation of Tabula Rasa. Such damaged brains, truly was a kindness to put them out of their misery. Oh well, don't worry about that bit, I'll leave a note with the bottles when it is time to restock again.

I can handle the injection. You will need to restrain the subject and hold off the vein for me. This drug must be given IV. Any perivascular leakage is extremely painful and could lead to tissue sloughing. Our clients will thank us to not sell them a defective product, yes?

Good. After the injection we will leave the subject alone in the room for ten minutes. Just place this rolled up towel over the crack in the door. The light won't hurt, but any kind of outside stimulation will make the transition rougher. It should be sealed up as tightly as a darkroom, and there is to be absolutely no loud noise in any part of the lab.

The ideal mindwipe is a beautiful process. It is as if I am some sort of divine entity, reaching into a person's head and plucking out that clay ball that life has shaped into a personality, smoothing it out anew, and setting it back in place for my clients to mold to their own liking.

I theorize that the subject experiences a bit of a haze throughout the experience, while passing through three distinct stages. In the first two they feel their memories slipping away and a void being created in that part of the mind. You will often hear quite a bit of noise in the first few minutes. It seems to be rather painful, but of course they will not remember it once they enter stage three.

This is where it is especially important for the sensory deprivation to come into play. All the experiments I have run with subjects in normal environmental conditions resulted in a rapid onset of hysteria. The mind must be given a few minutes to adjust to its new blank setting before trying to process too many new things.

Another important thing is that the client be the first person that the subject encounters. I always send him in to release the subject from restraint. You've heard of imprinting, yes? Good. Well, this works in much the same way.

A mindwiped person is like a delicate little child. They have no identity or sense of what to expect in the wide world beyond the womb-like darkness of their surroundings. They need someone to come set them free, to guide and teach them. I instruct the clients to feed them a story about their rescue. It allows the client to assume a sort of parental role. They seem to like that. It makes them bond to their new master. Then all sorts of nasty things can happen to them, but it's all right because Daddy knows best, heh.

Well, there you have it. Any questions?

No, you may not use the mini refrigerator to store beer. Good heavens, how could you possibly think that drinking on a job like this is a good idea? I'm not paying for shoddy work here. Some of these people are going to be very dangerous. You'll need all your wits about you.

Come to think of it, I better show you where all the "special" restraining devices are kept. I have catch-poles and muzzles and tranquilizer guns. You've seen what Daniel can do, yes? He's nothing. Most of the dog-men's canine forms are quite a bit bigger than his. If you're not careful they're fully capable of tearing your arm off. I don't get them in all that often, but when I do it's a very exciting experience. Pity they're too rare to build up the whole business around. There's good money in selling shapeshifters.
For :iconyouasthenarrator: Biweekly object prompt: Instruction manual
Character- Dr. Fredrick Jameson, The Slave Dealer [link] from my fantasy/sci-fi/horror series Tabula Rasa [link]

The doctor must introduce a new henchman to the laboratory and explain how the brainwashing drug Tabula Rasa is used.

Help yourself to more of my creepiness. :lol: I still donít know why I love this guy so much, but I always have a lot of fun writing him in first person. I rarely use it with the rest of my characters.

I wish I could have kept Mr. Hare around a bit longer in Tabula Rasa. He was my favorite minor character (with Mr. Lupinacci being a close second).

Hmm, I guess this isnít exactly an object since it is verbal instructions. Iíll just say that Dr. Jameson didnít trust Hareís memory and wrote it all out for him anyway. :lol:

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The way I imagined this, it is as if you are listening in on one side of a telephone conversation. I kind of liked writing this way and might try some more later, but do you think it is too confusing or distracting?

Edits 6/22/10- smoothed out using suggestions posted.
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. =D
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010
It was our pleasure.
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Kitri-du-Lac Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010
This interesting piece offers an unusual perspective of one side of a conversation. This forces the reader to interact with the narrator, contemplating the missing half. The gruesome nature of the piece is thus intensified, making it a chilling read.

I have decided to suggest this to *DailyLitDeviations. If chosen your piece will feature in one of their daily newsletters. Good luck!

It would be appreciated if you would take the time to send me a note with a link to any prose pieces, by any other deviants, that you feel deserve to be featured. :)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =)
Yeah, I need to get in the habit of suggesting more things. :XD:
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beautyinreview Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
The conversation format is excellent, I think it adds a bit to the creepiness factor because we aren't 100% privy to everything that is going on.

I REALLY enjoyed this.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much. =D
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zoray Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Student Writer
I hadn't heard of the series before, but you just got me interested in it.
Very horrible stuff (the concept I mean).
I love the way you bring out the character in your narrative.
Nice work!:)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. It is my longest writing project to date, celebrating its first year of creation this month. =D
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zoray Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Student Writer
your welcome!
congrats on the first year :)
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Wolfrug Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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Very nice! Others have praised it quite enough, so I needn't be overly wordy, but the concept of the drug is a scary one. I liked the little things, on the overdoses and on the need for sensory deprivation and imprinting and whatnot. Somewhat believable. And creepy. It would've been nice to have some more anectdotal text on the earlier versions of the drug and how they messed stuff up, and I guess that if you know the science it'd be fun to hear a bit of that (or pseudo-science!). But yeah, I liked it - good voice, good setup. The only confusing thing was the very end there with the shapeshifters, but I guess that's part of your own extended universe ;)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I do enjoy coming up with pseudo-scientific scenarios. =D
Yeah, the series is part sci-fi, part fantasy. This is the sci-fi half, the shapeshifters are the fantasy.
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Aro-chan Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I thought the style and structure was very good, and that the one person speaking was pulled off, it seems exactly like a telephone conversation, and not one bit confusing hearing one side of speech. Very interesting, I liked this.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. =D
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Rauron Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010
To begin, I must say that your speaker comes across very vividly. Good job on quickly building a character.

This seems more direct than a phone conversation, but it's very easy to tell that we're only getting one side of things. If anything, you might want to tone down the bits where the doctor restates what Mr. Hare has said. [link]
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the suggestion. =)
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MoonShadow-DarkRaven Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010   Writer
I liked this one. I rarely write in the first person, and when I do the results are less than satisfactory. This inspires me to work on character creation a little more. :)

The lead is strong and the tone hooks the reader in. Even though I have yet to investigate your other works-(which I will do expediently)- the character certainly holds his own.

The ending, taken out of context in my case since I've never seen this character in action before, is also amusing. A good solid ending that sums up the entire piece but leaves the reader wondering about this new supernatural/odd-science twist on the whole fiasco.

The tone, though unorthodox, is quite understandable. The tone allows the reader to put themsleves in the shoes of Mr. Hare and begin to imagine what questions he was asking to elicit those responses. The addtion of the minibar suggestion also added extra depth to the mr. hare character. It made me imagine a very sarcastic and witty individual, even though I have never seen him in action.

To accomplish that much in such a short block of text is no easy task, and you accomplished it fantastically.

*scurries off to look at your gallery*

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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the in-depth comment. =)

The supernatural does play a part in the story, but I try to keep the main focus on the psychology and personalities of the characters. The short little self-contained offshoots help.

Glad this inspired you. Good luck with your own work!
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IceFarie Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010
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it's not confusing at all, I love the style, with only half the conversation it allows for so much more room for the reader to play around with. What is the other party thinking/feeling/saying? Who is speaking too? that sort of thing, it lets the reader wonder long after the story is done and I like that.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the feedback. =)
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monsuerlaclauddebut Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Student Writer
This was definitely an interesting read. I found it quite entertaining, I never can write comedy in my own works. Very good.

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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much. =D Comedy is a bit of a new thing for me too.
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AlphabeticalMisery Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
This is awesome. :) I'm almost upset I didn't read it earlier. He seems so confident. I like it.

*waits for the next installment*
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. He certianly is an interesting person to write for.
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weepingtrees Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
This was awesome! I loved the part about storing beer in the minifridge. I can also see why you like writing him in first person, he's a really interesting dude from that POV. Granted he's probably a really interesting dude from any perspective. ;) Really cool take on the instruction manual prompt!
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Glad to see that my creepier stuff can get a positive reaction. =D
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weepingtrees Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
Hahaha, it doesn't normally? Why shouldn't it? It's awesome!
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Kind of. I think people prefer to read my happier material, and even I can’t explain why my favorite subjects to write about are things like this.
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weepingtrees Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
I like stuff like this too. I haven't read a lot of your work, so I haven't seen the happier material, but I like this stuff too. A lot, actually. It's weird, people like my funny stuff, and they seem to like my weird/ crazy/ dark stuff too, but when I get true to life ish they never seem interested :XD:
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ShamefulTears Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010
Wow, that's... hideous. Not the writing style or anything; the concept. Very much plotworthy.

It reminds me, indirectly, obliquely and in a whole different genre, of a concept I thought up once... I'll send it to you in a note, I'm not ready to post it anywhere, or even to really write it, and I don't want to shout out about the concept where just anyone might see it, but I think I can trust you, personally, with it. :)
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, it’s some pretty scary stuff. The weirdest part is that the basic plot of the brainwashing came to me in a dream back in 2007. :lol:
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ShamefulTears Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010
That's not scary, that's neat! ^^ Someday I'm going to make a video game about giant robots in Ancient Greece, call it 'Clash of the Titans', and set the giant robot battles as the origin of the Greek Pantheon (a Zeus class robot with a plasma gun--100-foot-tall man, throwing lightning bolts! Eh? Eh! :D) And the idea came to me in a dream...
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Cu-Sith1 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I can see why you like this character so much, he has a very entertaining personality. I can picture the look of self-accomplished satsifaction on his face as he describes his drug.
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Leonca Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. He is also one of my favorites to draw, for that same reason. Very smug indeed. :lol:
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